Monday, December 10, 2007
Julie's Second Draft of 'Sea Cave'
hiss of sea air
Julie's comments on the revision process
"I wrote the first draft Sea Cave almost immediately after having my imagination fired by Pont du Gard; based on the visual image and sense impressions of various sea caves or flooded underground mines I have been in. Wrote it straight off in fifteen minutes, plus a few minutes tweaking, trying to nail the impressions with words.
Second draft – Read your comments, thought about what you’d suggested rather than considering the poem itself, then came back to it after 48 hours.
Cleared out one of my static blogs, posted it, and used red to highlight what was going to be slashed, and blue where I worked in a new idea. Tried to hold the title in mind, but rework the image suggestions so the bats are suggested etc and moved it away from epic narrative. I haven’t had as much fun in years.
With thanks for your suggestions, Julie."