tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16608180.post2026331114465049253..comments2023-04-10T14:29:56.153+01:00Comments on Raw Light: poetry & opinion since 2005: Pond: another sticky endingUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16608180.post-140705599868747912007-09-16T20:22:00.000+01:002007-09-16T20:22:00.000+01:00Hi JaneEndings are hard - it is a balance between ...Hi Jane<BR/>Endings are hard - it is a balance between tying it all up too neatly and the need for a strong last line.<BR/><BR/>For me, the issue with this one is 'This mud' because why 'this' mud - is it special mud? 'this' as opposed to other mud? and also that it isn't mud that clears, but water (I know I am being horribly logical - but it does cause me to pause).<BR/>I also wonder if it would be stronger by a sudden change in tense: if it were mine, I would be looking for something like "The water clears, reveals an empty heart."<BR/><BR/>AngelaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com